White Rabbit

It seems prolonged, and without enough emotion or angst to keep one occupied.

To be frank...don't worry about charecter relations, as long as the charecters exist, it's ok. The story is simply a cautionary tale, but a good one in the sense that ...

I enjoyed this poem very much, the title caught my eye. My only real dilemma is the lack of rhythm, and clarity. Even free verse must have rhythm through comprehension. ...

I like that you're expressing something deep in a destructive way.

Within me there is a decline Whether a slow, slipping decline that passes through my soul like wet cement Which goes, and goes for days, and then dries out, and ...

Ninety-Three, ninety-three is the number of pill bottles setting on my window sill. Some are laying, some stand, others rest on the floor, all are empty. In all, I’ve put ...

I like this a lot! It just speaks clearly. I loved "we're all just china dolls".

I disagree, I feel that the unique rhyming style flowed wonderfully throughout the poem. This flow gave the poem a certain melody that's hard to attain without effort. It expresses ...

Beggining was good, and creepy. The middle seemed to suggest laboar, or sodomy(Not sure). The end more suggests laboar, but hey. These dilemas make it hard for me to get ...

I like the discease idea (BUT) I can't tell what your talking about. Other than that, not too shabby.

I'm writing this on a whim, and I'd like to see the result. 1. Not born, only made, simply sent, Made to judge, to be judged, to be diagnosed The ...

Good story, I can agree with the others about the rythim(no biggy). Howwever it does remind me a lot of "Dope Hat" by Marilyn Manson. Any relation?

I am a man made of metal, created to survive. A secret weapon, at a secret base. A monster made to save the human race. This hole in may head ...

I like this a lot, it's very expressive.

Very well spoken. It says plenty about your thoughts on slavery. I like the idea of this poem.